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Dhruvo
September 6, 2007, 04:30 PM
Well i made a poem 3 years ago when i was 8,its my first ever poem,here it is:

Moon Light
Moon light moon light
tonight you are very bright
please dont go away
you are bright you have a light
and you will never go away.

the end xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

well do you guys like it ?
i know that its a bit short but i was only 8 that time lol

Bengaliprince176
September 6, 2007, 04:34 PM
lol not bad Dhrubo bruv!!! lol i can imagien u writing sum luv poems when ur older, gettin all the ladies!! get practisng bro!!

Dhruvo
September 6, 2007, 04:39 PM
lol not bad Dhrubo bruv!!! lol i can imagien u writing sum luv poems when ur older, gettin all the ladies!! get practisng bro!!
haha okay lol.

rubel_18
September 6, 2007, 04:41 PM
gud poem Dhrubo

Miraz
September 6, 2007, 04:54 PM
It's a very good poem from an eight year old kid.

You have got the ability, keep writing. :)

cricket_pagol
September 6, 2007, 04:58 PM
Well i made a poem 3 years ago when i was 8,its my first ever poem,here it is:

Moon Light
Moon light moon light
tonight you are very bright
please dont go away
you are bright you have a light
and you will never go away.

the end xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

well do you guys like it ?
i know that its a bit short but i was only 8 that time lol

Nice work Dhrubo... keep writing!!!

Rommel
September 6, 2007, 05:20 PM
Tamim, Ash, and Mortaza lead our side
Hopefully one day we will become bonafide
One day in the future we will be great
But for now we face the same fate
We lose to teams like Lanka and Pak
But we will eventually fight back
Our fans are the greatest because we have to see regular losses in Test
But one day, one day we will be the best

Dhruvo
September 6, 2007, 05:22 PM
thanks everyone for those great and kind comments,i really appreciate it,well i also have 3 stories i wrote when i was 8 aswell,but they are too long lol so maybe later.

Dhruvo
September 6, 2007, 05:24 PM
Tamim, Ash, and Mortaza lead our side
Hopefully one day we will become bonafide
One day in the future we will be great
But for now we face the same fate
We lose to teams like Lanka and Pak
But we will eventually fight back
Our fans are the greatest because we have to see regular losses in Test
But one day, one day we will be the best
great poem ro bhaiya,even though this thread is about me :-D lol just kidding.

Puck
September 6, 2007, 07:11 PM
dhrubo,

you have been given much encouragement in this thread. i wanted to be a little more serious, especially, if you wanted to take writing seriously.

writing is a craft and what it expresses, depending on the medium, can approach an artform. like all crafts, learning about it makes you a little better each day. once you have acquired the basics, you may break them creatively.

good writing needs no accolade. the very best is pairing it down to the very basics and reporting it exactly how it happened.
i don't wish to discourage you. however, i also don't want to raise your hopes to an unjustified level. if you are serious about writing then stop writing and start reading. read, read and read. read for the next dozen years. when you are 24, pick up the pen again.
best wishes,
puck

Nocturnal
September 6, 2007, 07:17 PM
are you serious puck??
...
...
joking..............:-p

Rabz
September 6, 2007, 07:24 PM
Nice work Dhrubo.
You have got the talent, keep it up.

rubel_18
September 7, 2007, 04:26 AM
Nice poem ro1249

Antora
September 7, 2007, 04:32 AM
Well i made a poem 3 years ago when i was 8,its my first ever poem,here it is:

Moon Light
Moon light moon light
tonight you are very bright
please dont go away
you are bright you have a light
and you will never go away.

the end xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

well do you guys like it ?
i know that its a bit short but i was only 8 that time lol

woot woot!!! we have a genius!!!!
nice work dhrubo!!!

Antora
September 7, 2007, 04:33 AM
Tamim, Ash, and Mortaza lead our side
Hopefully one day we will become bonafide
One day in the future we will be great
But for now we face the same fate
We lose to teams like Lanka and Pak
But we will eventually fight back
Our fans are the greatest because we have to see regular losses in Test
But one day, one day we will be the best

niceeeeeeee

zahid
September 7, 2007, 04:35 AM
This was what I wrote when I was 8.

MonaLisar chokhey osru dekhey
Amar Ridoye jhor uthey...

:-D

Sohel
September 7, 2007, 05:04 AM
Cute ... galtalo tipte tipte bhaurta hoye jachchhe ...

Farhad
September 7, 2007, 01:13 PM
Good work Dhrubo, but why dont you try writing one now. We'll see how much youve improved :)

Rajowana
September 7, 2007, 03:23 PM
Good Work Dhrubo and ro1249!!!!
keep it upp

Rommel
September 7, 2007, 03:48 PM
thanks Rajowana.

Rommel
September 7, 2007, 03:49 PM
Good work Dhrubo, but why dont you try writing one now. We'll see how much youve improved :)

Yea BD, write a poem so we can see your improvement.

Bengaliprince176
September 7, 2007, 03:52 PM
nice poem ro1249!! ur a poet- but didnt know it!!! got sum young budding poets here!! future Tagore and Nazrul??

Dhruvo
September 7, 2007, 04:48 PM
dhrubo,

you have been given much encouragement in this thread. i wanted to be a little more serious, especially, if you wanted to take writing seriously.

writing is a craft and what it expresses, depending on the medium, can approach an artform. like all crafts, learning about it makes you a little better each day. once you have acquired the basics, you may break them creatively.

good writing needs no accolade. the very best is pairing it down to the very basics and reporting it exactly how it happened.
i don't wish to discourage you. however, i also don't want to raise your hopes to an unjustified level. if you are serious about writing then stop writing and start reading. read, read and read. read for the next dozen years. when you are 24, pick up the pen again.
best wishes,
puck
okay thanks puck bhaiya,i will keep that in mind.

Dhruvo
September 7, 2007, 04:48 PM
Nice work Dhrubo.
You have got the talent, keep it up.
thanks sydney bhaiya,i appreciate your appreciation.

Dhruvo
September 7, 2007, 04:51 PM
woot woot!!! we have a genius!!!!
nice work dhrubo!!!
thanks antora apu,your good comments are very good.
Cute ... galtalo tipte tipte bhaurta hoye jachchhe ...
hahaha anyways thanks sohel nr bhaiya

Good work Dhrubo, but why dont you try writing one now. We'll see how much youve improved :)
thanks farhad bhaiya,but i cant right one now its 1:00 in the midnight lol
Good Work Dhrubo and ro1249!!!!
keep it upp
thanks rajowana apu,it means alot to me.

Rommel
September 7, 2007, 05:01 PM
niceeeeeeee

thanks

Nafis_BD
September 7, 2007, 05:28 PM
Dhrubo seems like you really have some talent. That poem is very good for an 8 year old kid. I am looking forward to reading your stories as well!!

Ro bhaiya your poem was really nice too. Never knew you are a poet.

Keep it up guys. Personally I hate writing poems but I like to read/hear them a lot!!

zahid
September 7, 2007, 05:36 PM
Amarta niya keu kisu koilo na?- :-P

Anher
September 7, 2007, 05:58 PM
dhrubo,

you have been given much encouragement in this thread. i wanted to be a little more serious, especially, if you wanted to take writing seriously.

writing is a craft and what it expresses, depending on the medium, can approach an artform. like all crafts, learning about it makes you a little better each day. once you have acquired the basics, you may break them creatively.

good writing needs no accolade. the very best is pairing it down to the very basics and reporting it exactly how it happened.
i don't wish to discourage you. however, i also don't want to raise your hopes to an unjustified level. if you are serious about writing then stop writing and start reading. read, read and read. read for the next dozen years. when you are 24, pick up the pen again.
best wishes,
puck

Very intelligent Puck!
Thoughtful advice.

Dhruvo
September 8, 2007, 06:52 AM
Dhrubo seems like you really have some talent. That poem is very good for an 8 year old kid. I am looking forward to reading your stories as well!!

Ro bhaiya your poem was really nice too. Never knew you are a poet.

Keep it up guys. Personally I hate writing poems but I like to read/hear them a lot!!
thanks nafis bhaiya,you have some good talents too like an excellent cricketer MashAllah then a well mannered lad ,a great bc member for me etc.

Antora
September 8, 2007, 06:54 AM
Amarta niya keu kisu koilo na?- :-P

me me me me!!!!! i have sumfin to say........................you knew monalisa when you were 8?????????/:):-p

zahid
September 8, 2007, 11:03 AM
me me me me!!!!! i have sumfin to say........................you knew monalisa when you were 8?????????/:):-p

We went to the same Primary School. She was a friend then. Who knew she would become a MODEL after all these years? :hairpull:

Sumon77
September 11, 2007, 08:03 AM
thanks everyone for those great and kind comments,i really appreciate it,well i also have 3 stories i wrote when i was 8 aswell,but they are too long lol so maybe later.
hahaa.. Dhrubo... why all the writings at 8? what happened last 3 years?

Dhruvo
September 11, 2007, 08:25 AM
hahaa.. Dhrubo... why all the writings at 8? what happened last 3 years?
yeah well at that time i was damn busy lol,exams after exams man i was in pressure but thanks to Allah i topscored in all those 3 exams in my class.

Sumon77
September 11, 2007, 09:00 AM
yeah well at that time i was damn busy lol,exams after exams man i was in pressure but thanks to Allah i topscored in all those 3 exams in my class.
nice to hear that Dhrubo... keep it up.

Dhruvo
September 11, 2007, 10:32 AM
nice to hear that Dhrubo... keep it up.
thanks bhaiya,i appreciate it.